This week i' am doing a comic strip and the others are doing stop motion like that anyway forget that , my comic strip is about holes so this is the comic strip I got, and I need to say if you make a comic you need to put a color on it and not dirty so I hope you enjoy have a good day thank you BYE!!
Hi Jullien great comic strip that is a very interesting maybe next time put the picture somewhere it is not sunny were other people can see but that is looking good.
ReplyDeleteHello Jullien, your comic strip was amazing I like your drawings they're quite good. But maybe next time put more colour into them, that's all. Anyway it was a good comic strip.
ReplyDeleteHey Jullien,
ReplyDeleteI really like your comic strip about holes. I also really liked your drawing too. But I can't see the comic very well, maybe you could make a slideshow next time about it. But anyways I really like it, and did you draw the comic strip by your own??
Hi Jullien, I really liked your comic strip that you've made. I've found some mistakes that you should remember next time. For your title the start of the word should be a capital letter. As well in your title it should be a catchy title and you should tell what is it about. You have done some retelling so the title should relate about retelling. Now the next mistake, You should know that you have to write a capital letter for I or a name of a place. Why should people forget about the retelling and stop motion that your group has done, that's one of the main things. When you wrote about to put some colour and to not make it dirty, why didn't you add some colour on the 2nd photo? I think that you should make the comic strip longer and a few pages more like our comic strip that we've made. (http://hpskhushp.blogspot.co.nz/2017/08/the-shadow-children-haddix-among-hidden.html) Axle, Vann and I have made a 10 page 📄 retelling comic strip. We've worked hard to make this comic strip I hope you have a look at it. Now let's go back to the topic, there are a few mistakes left to talk about. On your paragraph you have just added only one full stop!!!! You have just added commas. When you took your photo why couldn't you place the photo on the table? As well your fingers and raincoat were showing. I hope you like my comment. Have a cool 😎 day!! Bye!!
ReplyDeleteHi Jullien, I like your comic strip but you forgot to put a full stop after you said "BYE!!" . Anyway keep up the good work, have a great day, bye.
ReplyDeleteHi jullien I really like your comic strip on holes it is really cool and
ReplyDeleteIt reminds me of when I read the book I found it very fascinating and fun to read.
Maybe next time you could double your spelling mistakes and check if you sentences make sense.
Have you seen holes the movie and if you have what's your favorite part?
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